Hello and welcome to the Story Grid podcast. This is a show dedicated to helping you become a better writer.

I'm your host Tim Graal and I am a struggling writer trying to figure out how to tell a story that works.

Joining me shortly is Sean Coyne. He is a creator of Story Grid, the author of the book Story Grid,

and an editor with over 25 years experience. In this episode,

we dive into the second sequence of my middle build, and I'm fresh off of this great win where I

wrote all of these scenes that got his approval and allowed me to move on, and so I confidently

wrote these scenes, and, well, you'll hear what

he has to say about them. So he offers me some really good feedback on where I went wrong and where

I went right in the sequence and the kind of things I need to fix to really make them work. So if you

have struggled with, you know, writing a sequence of scenes where, you know, it gets you

from point A to point B, but it just is missing something.

This is going to be a great episode for you.

I think you're really going to get a lot out of it.

So let's jump in and get started.

So, Sean, I've written, I've finished off the next sequence and I sent you that. So I actually sent you

the 17th scene, which you had already seen before through the 20th scene because that in my mind

was a complete sequence. So I sent you that. And I actually wrote three whole scenes,

well, like two and a half because about halfway through the third scene,

I was like, this sucks. And I just like threw it away. I mean, I have it, but I like threw it in

the trash because it was like, I tried to come up with this scenario and it just wasn't working

and like everything was moving too fast. So like Jesse kind of came to this moment where she

was like attacked in the first part of the scene, which left me with like nothing to do for the

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